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16 October 2009 @ 12:16 am
Procrastinated Meme's # 2  

Yeah, more procrastination completed.  Again, If I owe you credit let me know.

The Story that Never Was Meme  
 
Give me the title of a story I've never written. You may also give me some feedback telling me what you liked best about it, and I will tell you at least three, and possibly more of the following about it: the first sentence or the first paragraph, the last sentence or the last paragraph, the thing that made me want to write it, the biggest problem I had while writing it, why it almost never got posted, the scene that hit the cutting room floor but that I wish I'd been able to salvage, or something else that I want readers to know. 

 

In return for telling you about my Story that Never Was I would like you to post this in your own journal.

 

I don’t remember who tagged me for this one but whoever it was gave me the title Rise from the Ashes. If you are the person I was tagged by, let me know and I will gladly post your name here.

 

So… Rise from the Ashes, the story that never was by CmdrTekk

 

The first line: 

Seekers in the air had always meant protection and nothing more to those who lived high in the Towers, far above the common mechs on the streets below.

 

The last paragraph: 

Thoughts swirled within Mirage’s CPU as the Special Operations Officer by default stood watching over the camp. He had indeed come a long way in a very short amount of time. Still, the former towers mech hoped the new Prime would quickly find a mech to hold permanently this position he now held temporarily. For unlike some of the mechs temporarily holding Command positions for the new Prime, Mirage recognized that for as much as he excelled at the standard skills required for the job and had certainly proven himself capable, he lacked… something. Something he sensed was vital to truly succeed in the position. Perhaps it would come with time, but it was time he did not think they had. Somewhere though, some mech had the missing piece. But at present the Autobots were a disorganized rabble. A conglomerate of mechs from different backgrounds banded together under the face of Primus, all the while placing their hope, faith and lives into the hands of this new Prime; who just like the majority of the mechs here had little or no battle experience what-so-ever but had proven he could kill. Mirage shifted his stance as his thoughts continued to swirl. They had already proven they could fight and survive against military builds. They had hope and faith. They had a chance.

 

What made me want to write it:

 I was interested at taking a look at the first desperate/disorganized orns, deca-cycles, stellar-cycles, and meta-cycles of the war from a G1 cartoon Autobot perspective. The Autobots in the beginning were probably not very organized. In fact they were probably quite desperate. Leaders, aside from Optimus would have emerged and probably held positions of leadership by default based on a skill or skills they brought to the table or by a situation they found themselves in or a combination of the two. What might these situations have been, how were these skills revealed, discovered or adapted to the situation. How and why did these various leaders come to be where they are as these very first desperate cycles come to an end? I chose Mirage as my main focus character because he brought readily known skills that he individually was very familiar with and skilled with already to the table. 

 

The biggest problem I had while writing it: 

In choosing Mirage as my main focus character I had to work around his snobbish attitude towards mechs not of the towers and at the same time I needed a situation that would allow him to shine in a way that would be noticeable to other future Autobots. Oh and despite his personal snobbish feelings towards these other mechs, he had to work with them. And work with them well.  
 

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mmouse: Ironhide come heremmouse15 on October 18th, 2009 03:00 am (UTC)
I seriously want you to write this, because, damn, I think you'd do an awesome job with it.

Wowzers.
crazyhelocrazyhelo on March 18th, 2010 04:21 pm (UTC)
Okay, here ya go. Title: Hidden Plane in Sight

Please take special note that I spelled 'plane' and not 'plain'

Um lets see, what did I like about it? While the idea of the autobot datsuns being related to seekers is not exactly new, and i have seen a story where the Autobot Lamborghini's are seekers unintentionally in disguise, I'm not so sure I have ever seen where the six autobots Actually are seekers intentionally, in disguise. The scene just after they wake up on earth where Prime is thinking six seekers in the brig is the last thing he needs at the moment was pretty good.

Oh and in regards to the pre earth section: I understand why you had the pre war Autobot government destroy Vos out of fear and predejuice. You used it as a means to send the seekers to Megatron, but then after all the indications of how close Vos and Praxias are you turn around and FORCE the seekers to destroy Praxis. Talk about angst all around! I'm not sure Prowl or Starscream could ever have seen any of that comming, but still!

Overall you did a wonderful job creating a history and culture for the Seekers.


Edited: Cause I can't spell.